Comments on: the five dollar seat

By: sholeh

sholeh — Mon, 17 Nov 2008 17:48:24 +0000

Haha thanks, Dan.

By: Dan

Dan — Mon, 17 Nov 2008 07:01:37 +0000

first, this is nice. your narrative is good.
second, i like the little yellow box to the right which makes cheeky comments

By: Sholeh

Sholeh — Tue, 04 Nov 2008 04:41:05 +0000

haha yes Ronnie, I did observe this firsthand. I’m not entirely happy with it, but I haven’t written something like this in a long time (if ever!), so it was a little experiment for me.

You should try it! Plus, I’m sure your experiences would be much different than mine.

By: Ronnie

Ronnie — Tue, 04 Nov 2008 01:01:36 +0000

did you observe this event first hand in a train…

if so, I have observed random interactions between people on the train and have always wanted to write about it…and possibly add dramatic licence to make it into a short piece of fiction inspired by reality….

I guess you got there first!