A few things to explain about my poetry. First of all, the passages above all describe separate dreams that I had. Second, I like putting things in my poetry that don’t fit. Something that makes the person feel like they are a little off-balance, and ground the poem a little. I’m not a fan of too much fluff without something tying it down a bit.

There was no purpose to imagery, I actually didn’t think about it at all…just happened that way. I rarely edit my poetry and usually write without thinking about it in advance.

I never studied poetry or writing, really, so everything I do is rather loose, and while a lot of my poetry have a basis in reality…I don’t follow rules.

Thanks for commenting!

In terms of the poem, its incredibly good! Only two questions/suggestions…

1. The word shoes seems a little out of place. I understand the simplicity of the word in terms of trying to format your overall message of a stoic scene as portrayed by your “wondering” and “dream” theme… However, the word just has too hard of a sound to be at the beginning of the poem… its too finite (as outlined by the period after it), and, dare I say it, too descriptive for this time defying poem. (unsure as to what to change it with, but thats the initial impression)

2. Obviously I am sure that there is meaning behind it, but what is the purpose of beginning with ocean imagery and ending with forest imagery? Is it supposed to be a link to God/nature? Is it supposed to portray a forlorn state? Regardless, why begin in one place and end in another w/o any clear transition (especially since you “haven’t left yet?” Does this gain you anything rather than sticking to the original ocean theme?

Overall incredible piece, I just felt like throwing in my two cents and hope all is well!

so many layers.

so sholeh.